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The pictures illustrate a number of important changes which took place in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The two maps illustrate the changes in a town after building a hydroelectric power dam in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, in the middle of the
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map
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map,
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 there were rivers in both years.
While
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 both sides of the maps changed a lot, the top of the maps hasn't changed during that period of time. As the
map
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 illustrates, in
1990
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1990,
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 the
river
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 was dividing the
map
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 into west and east. At the left part of the
map
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, there were forests and
mountains
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 at the top,
in
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and in
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 the middle, there were Ancient structures and a variety of plants and animals.
On the other hand
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, on the right side of the
map
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 in the middle, there were irrigated
farmland
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farmlands
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, and at the bottom, there were
mountains
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 , as on the other side. In 2010, the
river
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 was removed to the bottom, and at the top there a lake was built. At the top of the
map
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, there were
mountains
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 as in 1990.
Then
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, the villages were reconstructed into a Hotel. At the head of the
river
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, there was built hydroelectric power dam which was connected to the
mountains
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 on both sides. Near the
river
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, there were builded a huge amount of electricity was built, and the village was removed to the right side of the
river
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.

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structure
To raise task reply, tell more about each place in the map and keep the two years in order, 1990 first then 2010.
grammar
Use simple, clear sentences. Check that you use the same time and avoid long runs.
vocabulary
Watch word choice. Words like Ancient structures can be made as old houses or ruins, so all can be known.
content
Keep to the map idea. Say what moved or was built, like the dam and the lake.
grammar
Fix spelling and form words right, for example 'were builded' should be 'were built'.
task response
The essay shows a map task with changes from 1990 to 2010.
content
You name key changes like river, lake, hotel, and dam.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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