The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
The bar chart demonstrates the types of transportation used by British students aged between 11 and 16 to get to school in one year. In general,it is evident that walking and cycling are the most popular methods for short
distances
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,
whereas
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travilling
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travelling
by car or bus becomes more common for longer journeys. For journeys less than one mile, walking was by far the most favourite means of transport, used by almost 90% of children.
However
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, for
further
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distances
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the proportion of walkers declined sharply to 50% for one to two miles and almost less than 10% for longer trips.Meanwhile, cycling follows a similar trend, peaking at roughly 75% for 1 to 2 miles, before dropping steeply for greater
distances
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.
In contrast
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, very few children travel by car or bus for short trips, but their use rises steadily with
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distances
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distance
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.Approximately more than 30% of students living two to five long away go by car, and for the same distance
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, bus
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bus
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buses are
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occupied by nearly 50% of students.
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, it was the dominant way of travel for
distances
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more than five miles
with
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, with
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around 70% of all trips.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • walk
  • bus
  • car
  • bike
  • to school
  • go to school
  • the most common
  • many
  • few
  • some
  • more than
  • less than
  • in the year
  • throughout the year
  • rise
  • fall
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stay the same
  • change
  • pattern
  • trend
  • age
  • younger
  • older
  • weather
  • winter
  • spring
  • autumn
  • year
  • time
  • and
  • but
  • whereas
  • compared with
  • also
  • travel
  • journey
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