IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Fossil fuels such as coal, oil, and natural gas are main energy sources in many countries. The use of renewable energy like wind and solar power is being encouraged. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, governments have been promoting environmentally-friendly
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 sources like solar and
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 power as an alternative to fossil fuels. In my opinion,
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can contribute positively to the environment, it is not an optimal way of generating electricity sustainably. When it comes to the positive benefit, one could make a case that ecologically friendly
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 reserves might be a transition to a low-carbon economy. Indeed, the detrimental effects of coal, oil and
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 on the environment can be mitigated by clean
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 sources. The process of extracting
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 from solar and
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 power does not emit CO2, providing clear electricity which can help decarbonise the environment.
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, I believe
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 positive influence has limited advantages
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 and is significantly outweighed by another negative aspect.
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 feel environmentally sound
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, they can't provide
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 for the national grid completely.They depend heavily on weather conditions, meaning
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 production can drop sharply on cloudy or windless days.
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, countries that rely solely on renewables might experience
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 shortages , which can disrupt industries and everyday life. Without effective storage technologies, renewable
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 can't meet national electricity demand consistently. In conclusion,
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 harnessing solar and
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 might be an ecologically viable solution, providing
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high
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 with them is not
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a feasible option at
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, I believe that depending on them as the main
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 source is not entirely a positive development.

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task plan
Plan your essay with a first line that states your view clearly.
content
Tell more why you think renewables alone are not enough and add one or two small examples.
grammar
Check for small grammar and spelling issues.
structure
Make long ideas shorter and use one idea per sentence or per line to stay easy to read.
strength
You give your view and talk about both sides.
strength
You use linking words like 'but' and 'however'.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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