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You have been invited to attend an interview for a place studying a course in a college. Unfortunately, because of a previous appointment, you cannot come at the time they wish. Write a letter to the admissions tutor: explain your position apologise and offer to come on another day or later the same day. ask how long the interview will be and whether there will be any tests during it. You do NOT need to write your own address.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Harjeet
kaur
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Kaur
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, and I am currently enrolled in
Business
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the Business
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 Management Course
in
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 your college. I am really glad to know that you
call
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called
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 me for an interview
,
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. Unfortunately
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unfortunately
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 I will be unable to make
this
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appointment
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 on
scheduled
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the scheduled
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 time on
Thursday
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Thursday,
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 21st
july
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July
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,
due to
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some
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a
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 previous urgent doctor's
appointment
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. I
am
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apply
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really apologise
to cancel
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for cancelling
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this
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appointment
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on
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at
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 that fixed time. Because I have already booked my doctor's
appointment
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 for my
worse
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worst
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 back pain, and they told me
come
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to come
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 to meet at 11'o
clock
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 on
same
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the same
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 day. They
also
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 told me strictly, I cannot miss
this
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appointment
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for
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on
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 that day. Can you please
,
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apply
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held
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hold
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this
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 meeting for the next day, so
i
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I
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 can join it?
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, could you please tell me the duration of the interview, and is there any assessment test during the interview process
.
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Thankyou
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Thank you
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 for
me
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apply
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understanding my situation, and
i
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I
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 await
for
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apply
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your
at
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response at
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 your earliest convenience. Yours
Faithfully
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faithfully
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, Harjeet Kaur.

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task response
To show you meet the task, give a real date or two you can come. Also add all your questions in one place.
coherence and cohesion
Put one idea in each paragraph. Use short, clear lines. Use simple words to link ideas.
tone
Polite tone is clear.
content
The letter asks for a reschedule and asks about the interview length and tests.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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