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In the real test, this will take you about 20 minutes, but there is no time limit here. STEP 1 - Read the task The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

In the real test, this will take you about 20 minutes, but there is no time limit here. STEP 1 - Read the task The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 given line graphs illustrate the subscription to mobile
as well as
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 fixed phone lines in four regions over the
period
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 from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, mobile phone
subscriptions
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 increased in the
UK
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, India, and Uruguay,
while
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 they remained the same in Eritrea over the decade.
Furthermore
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, fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 fell in the
UK
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,
whereas
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 they stayed unchanged in the other countries during the same
period
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. On the one hand, mobile phone
subscriptions
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 in Uruguay climbed from 40 to 150
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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 throughout the
period
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. The same trend occurred in India, where the figure shot up from 2 to 70
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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 over the same
period
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,
while
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 the numbers remained stable in the
UK
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 and Eritrea, at 110 and 2
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
On the other hand
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, fixed telephone
subscriptions
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 dropped in the
UK
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 from 60 to 50
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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.
Moreover
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, the numbers remained almost the same in Uruguay, Eritrea, and India, at 32, 3, and 3
subscriptions
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 per hundred
people
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respectively
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, respectively
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throughout
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, throughout
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 the
period
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, subscriptions, uk, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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