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The graph below provides information on the number of students from the US, UK and Australia who studied in other countries between 2002 and 2008. Write a report describing the main trends shown in the graph and making comparisons where relevant.

This
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 graph shows the
number
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 of national
students
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 from the US, UK, and
Australia
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that
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who
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study
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studied
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 outside of their country from 2002
until
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to
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 2008. At
first,
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Australia
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 had the
most
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largest
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number
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 of
students
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 studying abroad with 50,000
students
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 in 2002, followed by the US with 30,000
students
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, and the UK with the
least
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smallest
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amount
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number
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 of
students
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 studying abroad at 10,000. The trend roughly continues until the year
2004
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2004,
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 where the
number
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 of
students
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 that study abroad from the US
increase
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increases
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 from just about 35,000 in 2003 to more than 55,000 in 2004
,
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. This
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this
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number
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 is very significant
as
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, as
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students
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 from
Australia
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 that study abroad
also
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 decrease
for
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by
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 about 20,000 in 2004, making the US take the lead in 2004. Another significant change occurred in
mid 2005
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mid-2005
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until
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to
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2006
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2006,
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where
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when
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 the UK started to have a significant increase, having around 40,000
students
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 studying abroad by the end of 2006.
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 happened
simulatenously
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simultaneously
 with the decreasing
number
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 of
students
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 from the US
that
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who
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studies
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study
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 abroad. And from 2006, the trend shows a constant movement
with
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, with
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Australia
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 leading the statistics
having
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, having
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 more than 50,000
students
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 studying abroad by the end of 2008.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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