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Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to thair main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

University students
strugle
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struggle
 to understand how to use their knowledge and time before trying to qualify somewhere. They swing between learning about other
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.
In addition
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 to their main subjects
and
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giving
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give
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 all of their time and ambitions
on
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to
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 studying for a selected course.
Firstly
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, learning different
areas
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while
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 studying the main subject can be challenging. It takes a lot of nerve and control to know how much mark you can withstand. Basically, if a student gives a good amount of effort, the grind can be
awarding
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. Understanding
about
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other
areas
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 can improve your chances of finding the best environment for the future. Experimenting and communicating
is
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also
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 the
benefit
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 of learning in different
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. The only problem that can be
incountred
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 is the lack of time for yourself, sometimes even a waste of opportunities.
On the other hand
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, giving all effort
for
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to
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main
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the main
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 courses can be boring.
It’s
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 a combination of
wasting
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waiting
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 for the right moment and seeking a subject that you can stick to.
Truthully
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Truthfully
, I think that going with
main
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the main
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cources
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courses
 will be more beneficial. The reason for
this
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 statement is that you already know
this
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 area and
it’s
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 easier to
continuously
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continue
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 working on it. The main problems are that people don’t have a lot of fields to pick from
and
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, and
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 it can be a bad influence on
your
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their
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 future work. So, both learning many additional subjects and learning only the main courses can be rewarding. But knowing that sticking to a subject that you already love can help you
to
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apply
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improve in that area.
It’s
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 not about the subjects that you pick,
it’s
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 all about knowing your
limas
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limits
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 and doing your best in whole
areas
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.

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task response
Plan the essay with a clear plan. Start with your view in one sentence. Then write two body paragraphs with one main idea each and a short example. End with a short conclusion that restates your view.
coherence
Use clear links to show the flow. Use words like First, Next, Also, But, For example, So.
language
Watch spelling and grammar. Many small errors make you hard to read. Use short simple sentences.
content
Give real examples from student life to show your point.
task response
You present both sides and give your own view.
coherence
There are some useful linking words.
structure
Your topic is clear and easy to follow when read aloud.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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