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The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of water in UK rivers that was classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The line graph gives information on the proportion of water in UK
rivers
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 that was categorised as having good chemical
quality
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, over a 12-year period from 1990 to 2002.
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, what stands out from the chart is that the
quality
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 in Wales and England decreased,
while
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 the
quality
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 in Northern Ireland and Scotland
rivers
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 increased. As the chart shows, Wales had the highest percentage at 95% in 1990.
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, it experienced a gradual drop to 80%
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 by the end of the period. In the case of the percentage of water in England’s
rivers
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 started at around 45% in 1990, which was followed by a significant increase to 60% in 1996. Despite a sudden fall to 30% in 1998, the
quality
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 of the river grew sharply in the final year.
In contrast
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, the proportion of water in Northern Ireland’s
rivers
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 showed an increase from about 82% to 98% between 1990 and 2002. As for Scotland, the figure began at 20%, after which the figure climbed steeply to 50% in 2000.
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, by the final year, it witnessed a small decline to 40%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rivers, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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