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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates how many billions of
minutes
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telephone
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of telephone
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 calls, consisting of local - fixed
line
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, national and international - fixed
line
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, and mobile
calls
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calls,
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 happened in the UK in a
7-years
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7-year
 period from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, the
minutes
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 of local
-
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apply
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fixed
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fixed-line
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line
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 calls dominated the amount of
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the UK for the period.
Minutes
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 of the other two categories of calls are consistently increased for the period.
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,
minutes
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 of mobile calls increase more significantly than
minutes
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 for national and international
fixed
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fixed-line
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line
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 calls. Local-fixed
line
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 started as the highest in 1995 with 70
billion
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minutes
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 of calls and successfully maintained its position until 2002 with the same
minutes
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 of calls. The
minutes
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 of local-fixed
line
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 calls consistently increased until 1999 at
its
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their
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 peak with 90
billion
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minutes
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 of calls. After that, the
minutes
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 slowly decreased. The highest rise
happened
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occurred
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to
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in
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 the
minutes
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 of mobile calls. Mobile calls were under 10
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995
but
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, but
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 successfully soared to almost 50
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002. The national and international fixed
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line
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lines
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also
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 faced a rise. From its dip with under 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995,
then
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 consistently
grow
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grew
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 to over 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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