The charts present the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts present the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts present the average percentage in typical meals of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars, all of which may unhealthy if eaten too much.
The
pei
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pie
chart elaborates, the average percentage of
meal
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meals
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containing
sodium
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, saturated fats, and added
sugar
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, used in the USA, if taken too much become unhealthy for
individual
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individuals
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.
Overall
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, among the various
meal
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meals
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, dinner plays
main
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a main
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role in
utilsing
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utilising
the
sodium
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, saturated fats and added
sugar
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.
while
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these items
least
Verb problem
are least
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found in
break fast
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breakfast
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. To commence, for
break
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breakfast
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fast the amount of
sodium
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taken
are
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is
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14%,
while
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for
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apply
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the amount of saturated fat and added
sugar
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obtained by Americans
are
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is
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16% respectively.
However
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, for the lunch, the
sodium
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intake is more than
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a quater
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quater
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quarter
,
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.
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Similarly
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, for the next two
ingredent
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ingredients
, it
show
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shows
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the difference of 3% and 10%.
On the other hand
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,a major portion of
sodium
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is taken for dinner, which is 43%.
Nonetheless
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, for other two
are followed
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follow
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35% and 23%. The highest amount of added
sugar
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and
sodium
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are
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is
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found in
snack
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snacks
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, it is
near to
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nearly
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half
,
Punctuation problem
;
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on the contrary
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, saturated fat remains only 37%

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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