the pie chart below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

The given pie chart illustrates the comparison of different kinds of
energy
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production
of
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France in 2 years.
Overall
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, the
fossi
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fossil
energy
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, which included coal,
petro
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petroleum
and gas, remained the 3 biggest parts to produce
energy
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in 1995 and 2005,
while
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the other 2 took much smaller places in the pie chart.The domestic
energy
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producing structure has changed a lot
as
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the time passed through 20 years. In 1995, about 30% of
energy
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was produced by gas
and
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coal took a similar part as well, which were the
biggest
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two biggest
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2 methods to produce
energy
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. The
energy
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produced by
petre
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petroleum
was less than the 2 former
fossi
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fossil
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energy
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energies
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, but it
also
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took about 30%.
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the
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nuclear
energy
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and others took about only 10% together.
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, in 2005,
although
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coal and gas still remained about 60% together, the use of petro has declined
about
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10%. At the same time, nuclear and other
energy
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took
abot
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about
10% for each,which has doubled.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparison" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nuclear energy
  • Renewable energy
  • Non-renewable energy
  • Technological advancements
  • Government policy
  • Environmental policies
  • Investment in renewable technologies
  • Traditional energy sources
  • Coal usage
  • Natural gas
  • Environmental regulations
  • Energy consumption
  • Energy production levels
  • Proportion
  • Broader trends
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