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The line graph shows the percentage of the population living in cities in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040.

The line graph illustrates the proportion of
papulation
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population
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 living in urban areas in the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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,
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 from 1970 to 2040.
Overall
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,
Malaysia
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 consistently maintained the highest urban
population
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rate
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 throughout the period.
Notable
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, the
urbanization
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urbanisation
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 of
Indonesia
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 underwent the most remarkable growth, ultimately surpassing
the
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that
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Thailand
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of Thailand
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 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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.
In contrast
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, the
rate
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 of
Thailand
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 was relatively stable
increasing
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 compared to
other
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the other
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 three cities. In 1970,
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the highest city
population
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 percentage at around 32%, followed by
Malaysia
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 at approximately 30%.
Thailand
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 and
Indonesia
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 had much lower rates, at 18% and 14% respectively. Over the
followed
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 two decades, the
Philippines
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 experienced a remarkable increase, accounting for the highest growth
rate
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 of nearly 50%.
However
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. During 1990-2010, the
urbanization
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urbanisation
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 of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 exhibited a declining trend only in the four cities,
then
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resuming
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 growth in
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last
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the last
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 years.
Thailand
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’s urban
population
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was
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 progressed gradually, rising from 18% to around 30% in 2020,
while
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is
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it is
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 predicted to remain the lowest
rate
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 among the four, accounting for about 48%. All four cities are projected to stably increase their city
population
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 over the next 20 years, with
Malaysia
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 reaching the largest percentage at nearly 80%, followed by
Indonesia
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 at around 60%, and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 at nearly 52%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines, malaysia, thailand, indonesia, population, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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