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The line graph shows the percentage of the population living in cities in the Philippines, Malaysia, Thailand and Indonesia from 1970 to 2040.

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The line graph illustrates the proportion of the population living in cities in the
Philippines
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,Malaysia,Thailand and Indonesia between 1970 and 2040.
Overall
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, all four countries will have more people living in cities over time.Malaysia will always have the highest percentage,
while
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 Thailand will have the lowest. In 1970,Malaysia and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had about
percentage 30
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30 per cent
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 of their population in cities.Malaysia’s
number
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apply
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significant growth
to
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is expected to
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around
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reach around
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percentage 80
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80%
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 in 2020,and it will reach 85% by 2040.The
Philippines
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precentage
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percentage
 stayed around 30%-50% from 1970 to 2030,and will rise to 55% in 2040. Thailand and Indonesia started lower,at about 20% and 50%
respectively
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, respectively
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.Indonesia’s urban population grew fast and will go up to 65% by 2040,passing the
Philippines
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 after 2010.
Thailand’
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Thailand’s
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 growth was slower,and it will reach nearly 50% by 2040.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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