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Band 4.5

Write a letter to the library manager. Give your opinion and suggest alternative activities or services during the closure.

Dear
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, Thank you for your email . I understand that the library must close for three months . It is good that you will repair the building and put new novels and other action books, but
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 feel myself little bit sad because
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 like to go here every day . I think maybe you can make some online lessons when the bookstore is closed.
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 can help students continue to read and never stop . And,
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 hope can change some things in the library . The
electrcity
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electricity
 sometimes does not work well . Maybe
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 put a lot of books
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other
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 novels in
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 area . Replace the old places with new novels. Thank you for your attention to our opinion . Thank you for your attention to our opinion. I hope everything goes well and that we can come back soon.

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task response
Be clear about your main aim. Say what you want from the library in one simple line at the start.
coherence
Put one idea in each paragraph. Use short, simple words to link ideas.
grammar
Fix small spelling and grammar. Use the right form of words.
format
End with a clear and polite closing.
tone
Polite tone toward staff.
content
Shows care for readers and keeps the idea of helping.
content
Gives ideas for other activities during the closure.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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