The graph below shows the population figures of different types of turtles in India between 1980 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the population of different
species
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of
turtles
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in India between 1980 to 2012.
Overall
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, where Green
turtles
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along
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, along
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with all other
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species
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species,
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mirrored the trend, Leatherback
turtles
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and Olive Ridley
turtles
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notices to have a contrasting trend
with
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, with
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former
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the former
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decreasing over
the
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apply
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time and the latter increasing. Starting from 100,
along with
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all other
species
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, in the year
1980
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1980,
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green
turtles
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showed
10
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a 10
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% decrease in their growth by the
years
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year
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2012,
where as
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whereas
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all other
species
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had a 10% increase over the same period of time.
However
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, there was a peak noticed in the year 1988
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, touching
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touching
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reaching
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115. Even after starting at the same level of 100, Olive
ridley
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Ridley
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did show a steady growth in population
untill
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until
1996
hitting
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, hitting
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its best at
140
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140,
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after which
,
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apply
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it kept on
fluctuation
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fluctuating
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but
maintaing
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maintaining
an average of the same figure. Leatherback
also
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starting
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started
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from 100
intially
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initially
, grew in number by 10%
untill
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until
1987, and
then
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had a dramatic downward fall
hereafter
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thereafter
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. Falling down to approximately 60.
Thus
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being
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, being
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the only population to decrease significantly.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words species, turtles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population figures
  • types of turtles
  • increased
  • decreased
  • remained stable
  • highest population
  • lowest population
  • significant changes
  • trends
  • fluctuations
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