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The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main

The graph
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depicts
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 the amount of
consuming
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energy
in
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consumed in
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USA
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the USA
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 from 1980 with the prediction until 2030 in a report made in 2008. From an
overall
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 perspective, it can be seen that almost of sectors which are petrol and oil, coal, natural gas, nuclear, and solar/wind, increase in
quadrillion
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units
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.
In contrast
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, hydropower remains steady from 1980 until 2030.
First,
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petrol and oil had fluctuation until 1995,
which
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when
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 was consumed 35
quadrillion
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units
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at
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in
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 the initial year. Meanwhile, it started
significant
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a significant
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 increase and
predicted
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is predicted
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 will be consumed in 50
quadrillion
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units
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.
Second
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The second
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 sector was coal. Started around 15
quadrillion
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units
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, it was projected
double
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to double
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at
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by
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 2030.
On the other hand
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,
consumsing
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consumption
in
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of
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 natural gas was higher than coal in 1985, yet
,
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apply
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 natural
gaspredicted
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predicted
lower
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to be lower
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 than coal in 2030. The
last
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,
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tree
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three
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 sectors consumed below 5
quadrillion
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units
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 in 1985, but nuclear and solar/wind projected
increased
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to increase
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 more than 5
quadrillion
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units
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. Different
with
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from
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 the others,
hydropwer
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hydropower
 predicted below 5
quadrillion
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units
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.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words quadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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