The line graph shows the cost for watching films. the pie charts show the change in the percentage of market share represented by the three forms.

The line graph illustrates the
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of cost
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watching films. The pie chart gives information about how the market share is changing in percentage. Between the years 2005 and 2011.
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, we can see that renting a DVD is more popular than the other methods,
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legal downloading is the lowest.
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,
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going to the cinema
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kept on increasing throughout the timeline.
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the data, in 2005, buying a CD was
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, which resulted in a huge number of sales; the same applies to the
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. As for 2007 and 2009, both had similar revenues from going to the cinema, which were $11 and $11.50, respectively. For 2009, both owning a videotape and seeing movies online had
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price, which was $7.
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of the period,
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, the ticket fee rose to reach $14, which occurred when it dropped to 18%.

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