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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of women taking higher education in five
countries
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 - the UK, the USA,
Australia
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, South
Korea
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, and
France
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 - in 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figures for
Australia
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 and
France
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 show a small variation between 1980 and 2015.
In addition
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, it is
also
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 noticeable that females who
take
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pursue
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 higher education in the United Kingdom, the United States, and South
Korea
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 have experienced growth compared with both years. Focusing on the bars for
Australia
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 and
France
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, these two
countries
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 have maintained their values in both years. The percentage of women going into higher education in
Australia
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 was around 59% in 1980 and 2015. Meanwhile,
France
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 had a small fluctuation, which was about 4% because the figure surged from 50% to 54% Turning to the other three
countries
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 - the UK, the USA, and South
Korea
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 - these
countries
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 had a relatively significant gap between the two years. The rate for the UK was only 35% in 1980 but grew to 55%, which was an increase of 20%. The USA showed 38% in 1980 and rose to 58%. The women of South
Korea
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 were only 16% in 1980.
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, in 2015, the figure increased to 30%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, australia, korea, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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