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The charts below show the comparison of time spent, in minutes per day, by UK males and females on household and leisure activities in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates how
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time
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spent
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is spent
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 in minutes per
day
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 on three different leisure
activities
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and
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, and
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 the bar chart compares
between
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four
household
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 tasks among
men
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 and
women
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 from the United Kingdom in 2008.
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,
it is clear that
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 males had more free
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 compared
females
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to females
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.
Whereas
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,
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women
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 spend their
time
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 doing all
household
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activities
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 except repair. Both genders recorded the largest average minutes per
day
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 on TV, radio, and video
activities
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, with 137
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min
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 for
men
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 and 118
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minutes
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 for
women
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. Followed, reading activity accounted for approximately
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20
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minutes
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 per
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 for both
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sexes
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.
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 and
women
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 spent the lowest free
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 doing
sport activity
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sports activities
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15
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, 15
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min
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minutes
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 and 11
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min
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minutes
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 respectively. When it comes to
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women
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women's
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household
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activities
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, there was a significant gap between
cook
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 and washing
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tasks
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 and repair
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tasks
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, as cooking and washing represented nearly 80
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minutes
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 and repair with approximately 20
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min
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minutes
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 per
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.
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Men
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Men's
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household
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activities
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, on the one hand, they spent the lowest free
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 on clothes washing and ironing
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, about
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 10
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minutes
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, and they enjoy cooking and washing most of their
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. As for shopping activity accounted for over 20
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min
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minutes
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 for both genders.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, day, activities, household, men, women, min with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparison
  • Household activities
  • Leisure activities
  • Average
  • Significantly more/less
  • Markedly more/less
  • Striking difference
  • Counterparts
  • Societal norms
  • Differing interests
  • Dedicated time
  • Household tasks
  • Maintenance
  • Repairs
  • Pursuits
  • Socializing
  • Gender divide
  • Traditional roles
  • Allocation of time
  • Reflects
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