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Band 2

The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a mseum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The two plans illustrate the changes a museum went through in 1990 and in 2010. From the
perspective
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 of the entrance angle, one notable alteration was the relocation of the Statue from the northern part of the area to the
center
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 of the floor. The remaining space was used to expand the former Gift shop, located on the top left corner of the plan, which incorporated a Café by 2010. On the opposite side, a significant change occurred in the
the
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Archeology
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 gallery part, which was divided into a Children’s interactive zone and a Poster display area, both overlapping the same cumulative space.
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, the area between
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 Café, the gift shop and the Natural
history
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History
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 room
was modernized
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 with the installation of a lift. The Reception counter got enlarged near the Entrance. As a whole, the museum had undergone a number of major transformations from 1990 to 2010.

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Add a clear overview after the first line. Say the main changes in one short sentence.
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Cover all main parts of the plan. Some points are good, but a few changes are not fully explained.
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Be more careful with details of place and use. A few lines are not fully clear.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas by area, for example left side, right side, and center. This will make the report easier to follow.
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Use simple linking words like 'also', 'while', 'in contrast', and 'by 2010' in a clear way.
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Check repeated words and small form errors. They can slow the reader down.
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You clearly state that the museum changed from 1990 to 2010.
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You mention key changes such as the statue move, bigger reception, and new lift.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Most ideas follow a logical path from one part of the plan to another.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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