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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a mseum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The two
plana
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plans
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 show changes to
a
Correct article usage
the
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 ground floor of a
museum
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 from 1990 up to 2010.
To begin
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 with, one of the most
impressing
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impressive
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alteration
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alterations
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 was to the right part of the
museum
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.
Instead
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 of the Archaeology gallery in 2010 were build
tow
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two
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 different zones
such
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 as Children’s interactive zones and Poster display area. In
1990
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1990,
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 there were entrances to the gallery
but
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, but
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 in
2010
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2010,
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 the entrances disappeared. Another impression change is the placement of the statue. In
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the 90s
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90s
Punctuation problem
90s,
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 the
pice
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piece
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 of art was standing near the stairs
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however
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; however
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, in
2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 it
is
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was
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 in the middle of the
museum
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.
In addition
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,
the
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a
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 new innovation was made. Between the Gift shop
which
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, which
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 was enlarged by the way
and
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, and
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 the Natural history room
was installed Lift
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lift was installed
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. The Reception counter was moved from the
Museum
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 office to a tiny bit of the
center
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centre
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.
Overall
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, the Ground floor of
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museum
Correct article usage
the museum
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 was improving
since
Change preposition
from
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 1990
till
Change preposition
to
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 2010.

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overview
Make a simple view of the whole plan first, then show what was in 1990 and what is in 2010, and end with a short compare.
grammar
Use clean and short sentences. fix small slips like 'tow' and 'pice' and say 'plan' and 'area' clearly.
cohesion
Link ideas with clear words such as first, next, also, but so the read flows.
task response
Name the main changes and group them. Try to cover all big changes you see.
task response
The essay shows a try to show change over time.
coherence
It uses some linking words to show contrast.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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