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The plans below show the layout of the ground floor of a mseum in 1990 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The maps display the changes made in a museum on the ground floor between 1990 and 2010.
Overall
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, the ground floor underwent major alterations
in
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 that period of time.
One
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 of the main developments is the replacement of the Archaeology gallery with 2 zones,
one
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is
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apply
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aimed
for
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the
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children's interactivity and the second is the Poster display area. Another important addition is the construction of a lift, right above the Natural history room.
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, some relocations were made, the first
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 is the Statue position, which in 2010 was placed right in the centre of the floor
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 the second
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 is the Reception counter, which was moved closer to the entrance and separated from the Museum office. And the
last
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, the Gift shop expanded the area it occupied in 1990
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 the entrance became larger and centred. All other rooms, like
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the Local
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 history room,
Natural
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the Natural
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 history room and
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the Museum
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 office, didn't suffer noticeable changes,
as well as
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 the Stairs.

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task response
Your text shows key changes and has a start that says what the map is about. To raise the score, add a short final line that sums up the result of the changes. Be clear what is new and what is old.
coherence cohesion
Work on flow. Put all changes in order and group them by idea, like what was added, what was moved, and what stayed the same. Use small joins to link the ideas so the paragraph is easy to read.
strength
You show a clear list of the changes in 2010 compared with 1990.
strength
You use add words like 'One of the main developments' to start a new idea.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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