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You took your family to a nearby restaurant. You were disappointed with the meal and wish to complain to the manager. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter, » explain why you were at the restaurant » describe the problems » write about the action you want the manager to take Write atleast 150words

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention a combination of problems I faced during my
attention
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visit
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at
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 your restaurant on September 25 for dinner. My friends and I attended
at
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your restaurant to celebrate my birthday.
This
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 day was a valuable day for me, since we gathered
with
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together after
for
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about 3 years.
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, the
disappointed
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 condition of
food
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the food
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conveyed
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made
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 the event
to
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a bad memory for us. We had been ordering Kabab Kobideh, but it was too salty, which
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 it difficult to eat.
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, when it was served to us, it was cool
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as
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 the
breads
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bread
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were
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 too dry. These issues led to
feeling
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frequent waves of shame, washing me. I would suggest that you improve your services, especially during
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 events and purchase
freshness
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 materials for your restaurant.
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This
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 initiatives not only enhance your credibility among your visitors but
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 give a great sense of engaging experience to them. Thank you for considering these problems. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi

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task response
Explain why you came, then list the problems, then say what you want the manager to do. Put these parts in clear order.
coherence cohesion logical structure
Make each paragraph have one clear idea. Use link words like first, then, also, but, so.
greeting and closing
Use a good greeting at the start and a close at the end. Keep the tone polite.
complete response
Be exact about what was wrong and what you want as fix.
content
You tell why you came and what went wrong.
tone
The letter keeps a polite tone at the end.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unforgettable evening turned disappointing
  • anticipation
  • patronage
  • culinary experience
  • subpar
  • palate
  • lackluster service
  • rectify
  • compensation
  • amicable resolution
  • clientele satisfaction
  • due diligence
  • apology
  • quality assurance
  • redress
  • expectation management
  • constructive feedback
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