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The chart below shows the percentage of difference in income between men and women from 1978 to 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart
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shows the Proportion of difference in income between men and women from 1978
untill
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until
 2008
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, In detail,Japan
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 the highest
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figure
 in 1978 at over 49%,there is a
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significant decrease
 during the year ,
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 around 40%,
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 ranked second largest value in 2008 at just over 31%
,meanwhile
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. Meanwhile
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,the lowest share was
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to
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france
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France
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 ,
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remaing nummbers
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remaining numbers
 are felt between the highest and lowest values,
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 some values stay the same
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throughout
 the years. In general,the chart
Provides
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 the percentage of
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variation
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income
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in income
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 between men and women from 1978
untill
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until
 2008

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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