The graph below shows in percentage terms the changing patterns of domestic access to modem technology in homes in the UK.

The given line graph illustrates the proportion of dwellers who
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different kinds of modern technology in their homes in the UK over a period of 6 years, starting from 1996
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percentage for all domestic tools increased over the period, having
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to the internet was not possible until 1998. At the beginning of the period, the rate of
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to the CD player was 60%, which was the most common one compared to other modern devices.
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, it continued to rise slightly to finish around 80% in 2002. In sharp contrast, there was no sign of the internet until 1998. It started at around 15% and followed an upward trend to over 40%, which was the least popular one among others. Turning to other graphs,
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figure for the Mobile phone and home computer began at just under 20% and well over 20% respectively. After that, there was a moderate increase in having
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to the Mobile phone and exceeded that of the Home computer to receive well over 60%, which was around 20% higher than that of the Home computer in 2002.

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