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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

The line graphs compare the value of New Zealand's
imports
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 from
Australia
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 and Japan between 1994 and 2004, measured in NZ$
million
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.
Overall
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,
imports
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 from
Australia
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 showed an upward trend despite significant fluctuations,
while
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imports
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 from Japan, after an initial rise, saw a substantial decline towards the end of the period.
Australia
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 remained the primary source of
imports
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 for New Zealand throughout most of the decade. In 1994,
imports
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 from
Australia
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 stood at
NZ$ 4,000
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NZ$4,000
million
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.
This
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 figure rose to 6,500
million
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 in 1996 before dropping sharply to a low of 3,000
million
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 in 1999.
However
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, the trend reversed quickly, with
imports
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 climbing to a peak of approximately 8,000
million
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 by 2004, despite a temporary dip in 2002.
In contrast
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, New Zealand's
imports
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 from Japan began at 3,000
million
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 in 1994. The value grew steadily to reach a peak of 6,300
million
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 in 1997. After fluctuating around 4,000
million
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 in the late 1990s and hitting a secondary peak of 6,000
million
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 in 2000, Japanese
imports
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 experienced a consistent and sharp decrease, ending the period at only 2,000
million
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 in 2004.

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