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The line graphs below show the subscriptions to mobile and fixed phone lines in four different countries between 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs give information about the
subscriptions
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 of mobile and fixed
phone
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phones
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 per hundred
people
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 in four different countries from 2005 to 2015.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that the UK and Uruguay ranked highest in both mobile and fixed phone
subscriptions
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.
To begin
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, in 2005, the number of
people
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 who subscribed to mobile phones stood at about 100.
However
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, there was a gradual increase to approximately 120 the following year, and continued to level off until the rest of the
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. Uruguay
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 the other hand, started with less than 50 per hundred
people
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 in the first year; the number
then
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 rose significantly in the subsequent
years
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 and reached the same level as
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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in 2009. It rocketed again and peaked at 150
people
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 in 2013
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until it declined to 140 and remained constant in the final year. India and Entrea had the lowest
subscriptions
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 in both.
While
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 the former gradually inclined, the latter remained the same over the decade.
Next,
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fixed phone
subscriptions
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 for the UK stood
around
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at around
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 60
people
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 throughout the
years
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, the same as that of Uruguay , with just about 30
people
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. Citizens in the other two countries did not subscribe much to the landline. They all had below 10
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levels
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 in the
last
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 three
years
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.

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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the seventh paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subscriptions, people, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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