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Many employers are now offering their employees the option to work from home. As a result, employees will have much more flexible working hours in the future. Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, numerous leaders and managers are giving the choice to their workers to
work
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 from home, and the motive behind
that is
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 to help the employees
to
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have a variable
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 schedule in the
upcoming
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future. Working from their property, many people argue that it is
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best for them, and there are various reasons why.
Firstly
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, some find more comfort in working alone than with a group, which they may find distracting, and that results in them preferring
this
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 way and may even lead to a better quality of
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,
such
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 as good dashboards that illustrate the sales of the company.
Secondly
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, it helps the employees to save money, and that means there is no need to drive to the firm every day by car and waste money on gas or,
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, charge your card to use the metro.
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, it decreases the hours of
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 for some;
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,
it is clear that
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 residents may be living away from their workplace, and to add to that, there may even be traffic if we consider that they
work
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 in a big city. From my point of view,
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 the option of working from home may have its benefits, it
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 could affect a person's life; if one does not socialise with people for a very long time, it could lead
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 to be stressed, less confident, and more awkward with
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 colleagues.
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, working from home has its aspects and wonders, but if it is kept for a long time and for the near future, it may cause harm or damage to some by destroying their ability to socialise and not build their career network properly.

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task
Give a short clear intro that says if you see this as good or bad, and add 2 or 3 main reasons.
structure
Make each paragraph have one main idea. Start with a simple line that states the idea and end with a line that links to the next idea.
content
Add more real facts or clear points to show the topic, like costs, time, and how work at home can help or hurt.
cohesion
Use simple link words to show order and cause, like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore'.
grammar
Watch small grammar mistakes and keep sentences short and clear.
strength
The essay shows both sides and has a clear final view.
structure
The writer uses 'First', 'Second', 'Third' to show steps.
content
There is a conclusion that says what long use may do.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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