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Topic: Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

In recent days, many individuals choose to buy instant
food
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 rather than make it at home. There are lots of benefits,
such
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 as time and
money
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 saving, and it
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 has disadvantages,
such
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 as disorders and poor spending, and in
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 I will discuss them. One of the many reasons people tend to grab pre-prepared meals is that they do not have much time to cook;
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, employees in cooperative jobs work from 9 in the morning to 5 in the evening, plus the time they spend in traffic
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 they can reach the company. As for the second cause, the high cost of ingredients at the supermarket keeps
on
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increasing more and more each day, and
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 leads them to believe that buying packaged
food
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 is better for them to save
money
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.
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, as much as
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 topic has many advantages, of
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 it has some downsides to it.
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, the high consumption of junk
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 can lead to many illnesses,
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 as stomach problems, obesity, diabetes and even heart disease.
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, if the person spends too much
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 on restaurants and fine dining places, it may lead to financial problems,
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,
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 loss and the
ability
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 to manage cash in a bad way, which may force someone to go into debt.
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,
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 matter has different aspects to it; some may be bad, and some may be good. It is important that people learn how to manage and spend their income wisely and try to decrease the amount of unhealthy
food
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 they eat.

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