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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two diagrams illustrate
,
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 the current picture and changes planned in the heart of the town of Islip in the future.
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, there is an advancement planned in the transport sector,
accomodation
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accommodation
 and routes of connectivity. The countryside patch with a single road will be converted into a circular dual carriageway, connecting the settlement in the north
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 to the school and the houses in the south
keeping
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 them outside of
this
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 circle.
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 roundabout
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 will have an enclosed space consisting of advanced amenities. Currently existing row of shops and the park will be kept untouched,
although
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extended
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an extended
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 area for residency will be built
in addition
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the
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currenth
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current
 housing in the south.
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, there will be a construction of a new shopping centre towards the north of
inner
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the inner
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 space of the circle. A bus stand will be built to the west of the shopping centre. The east of
this
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 retail area will have an adjacent car
par
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park
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 and
new
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a new
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 housing estate with its
personal
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own
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 entry. The initial main road is converted into a
pedestrian only
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pedestrian-only
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 street ending
into
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at
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 the border of
dual
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the dual
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 carriageway on either
sides
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side
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. In conclusion, the central area of Islip will be converted into a fully equipped town centre with the availability of
convinience
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convenience
 and leisure.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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