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Writing Samples
Band 5

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. write a letter to your manager. in your letter -why you want to work in company's head office for six months -say how your work could be done while you are away- -ask for his/her help in arranging it.

Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Steven, I am writing to inform you that I would like to work in
head
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the head
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 office of our
company
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 for six months
due to
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 a specific reason. I am interested
to work
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in working
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 there because I believe that
this
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 would be beneficial since I can gain more experience
while
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 having some
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time
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apply
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extra
time
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 to study
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company's
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the company's
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 policies and laws.
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, I can get a chance a meet and
asking
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ask
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 some
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company related
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 questions from the employees working there. I will prepare all the important presentations ahead of
time
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 and will assign my assistant to take care of the important projects when I
will be
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 away. She can contact me
any
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anytime
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time
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on
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at
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 my email or my contact number
as
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 I will be available to respond promptly
for
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to
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 my
company
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's essential tasks. I would
highly
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 grateful if you could arrange my position in our head office as soon as possible. I assure you that I will be back with more skill that
this
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company
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 always expect from
it's
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its
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 workers. I await your prompt response. Thank you for your consideration and
time
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. Yours sincerely, Konna

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structure
Your letter has no clear plan. Add a short list of tasks you will do at the head office and how you will hand over work.
grammar
Fix small grammar errors like its, it's, would, grateful. Use short, simple lines.
coherence
Make the flow smooth by using small words to link ideas and move from one idea to the next.
structure
Try to keep one idea in each paragraph and start each paragraph with a small line about it.
tone
Polite tone and formal form.
structure
Ends with a proper closing.
content
You show a plan and wish to help the firm.
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