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The chart below shows the production and consumption of rice in seven different countries in 2008.

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The bar chart compares the amount of
rice
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 produced and consumed by Bangladesh, Indonesia, China, India,
Japan
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, Vietnam, and Thailand in 2008.
Overall
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, China and India had the largest
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
rice
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,
whereas
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Japan
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 recorded the smallest
figures
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. Notably,
rice
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production
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 exceeded its
consumption
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 in most countries, except for Bangladesh, Indonesia and
Japan
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. China and India produced 15 and 13
million
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tonnes
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 of
rice
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respectively
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,
while
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 their
consumption
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figures
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 stood at 14 and 12
million
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tonnes
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. These
figures
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 were the highest amount
seven
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for seven
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 nations.
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, Vietnam and Thailand
also
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 produced more
rice
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 than they consumed, producing 4 and 5
million
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tonnes
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 and consuming 2 and 3
million
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tonnes
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, separately
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separately
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respectively
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.
By contrast
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,
rice
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consumption
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 outweighed
production
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 in both Bangladesh and Indonesia, with
consumption
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 of 7 and 8
million
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tonnes
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 compared with
production
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 of 6 and 7
million
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tonnes
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
However
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,
Japan
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 showed the lowest
figures
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overall
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, with both
production
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 and
consumption
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 at 2
million
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rice, japan, production, consumption, figures, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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