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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

The two graphs show the main energy sources in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s.

The two graphs
illustrates
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illustrate
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 the various energy resources used in the USA in the two time periods ( 1980s and 1990s).
Overall
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, it is evident that consumption of oil reduced in the
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1990s
1990
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1990,
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whereas
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 that of nuclear
power
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, natural gas, and coal increased. The resource whose
utilization
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utilisation
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 for energy production remained constant was the hydroelectric
power
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. Oil was used in
higher
Correct article usage
a higher
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 percentage compared to other resources in both years
,
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;
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however
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however,
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it
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its
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 consumption declined by 9 % in 1990.
In contrast
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 to that, 5% more coal and nuclear
power
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 were used in the year 1990 compared to the year 1980. A similar uptrend was observed for natural gas, but only with a slight difference of 1% in the later year. Meanwhile, the only component whose
utilization
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utilisation
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 remained the same for both
the
Correct article usage
apply
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years was hydroelectric
power
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standing
Punctuation problem
, standing
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 at 5 % ( 1980 and 1990).

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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