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The table shows a breakdown of the most popular languages taken by native English speakers studying at the UK Centre for the Foreign Language Learning in 2020. Summarise the charts by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

According to
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 the chart table,we can observe that we can obtain
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 of information about the frequency of the languages native speakers want to learn as percentages
splited
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split
 depending on the genders.
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Firstly
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Firstly,
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 we notice the most frequent
language
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womens
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women
 are trying to learn is
mandarin
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Mandarin
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.
Then
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 it goes like
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spanish
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,
polish
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Polish
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,
arabic
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Arabic
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 and
lastly
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german
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German
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 has 10% as
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double-digit
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 values.Japanese,
welsh
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Welsh
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 and Italian
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apply
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is
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are
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 the least spoken among
this
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 community.
On the other hand
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, males are mostly interested
with
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in
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 the
arabic
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Arabic
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language
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.
Troughmore
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Throughout
 it goes like
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spanish
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Spanish
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 -as it was in the female chart- and
then
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mandarin
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Mandarin
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 and
german
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German
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has
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have
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 the same amount of learners It seems that
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this
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these
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 two communities of individuals
are
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do
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 not
having
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have
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 the same taste
of
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for
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 learning new languages.
For instance
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,
One
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one
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 of the highest
frequency
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frequencies
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 of speakers owned by
german
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Germans
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 in
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the males
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males
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male
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 chart with 14%.
However
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, females are not having that
much
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many
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 learners
on
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of
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 that
language
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, unlikely
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unlikely
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unlike
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.
In addition
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, they have the same
amount
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number
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 of
folks
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people who
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 decided to
larn
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learn
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spanish
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Spanish
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which
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, which
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 is
an
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apply
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information we can't disregard. The highest difference between these two groups has approached in
mandarin
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Mandarin
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, it had
an
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a
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 14% gap and
its
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it's
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 the most spoken one
in
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among
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the
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apply
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female
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females
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according
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, according
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 to the graph.
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However
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 the closest numbers were in
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spanish
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Spanish
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 with the same amounts. Italian
had
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also had
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also
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 close numbers
which
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, which
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 we can
also
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 say that it is one of the least spoken
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language
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languages
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 in both groups In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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 we can inform that
,
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apply
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its
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it's
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 a complicated chart where everyone
scattered
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is scattered
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 around to different
language
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 groups
we
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. We
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 can gain numerous facts from it.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, also, however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, spanish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breakdown
  • native English speakers
  • UK Centre for Foreign Language Learning
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • most popular
  • significance
  • notable trends
  • reflected in
  • traditional preferences
  • least popular
  • perceived difficulty
  • potential implications
  • geographical proximity
  • cultural ties
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