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It is a positive thing for people who are in senior management positions in companies to have much higher salaries than other employees in the same company or organzation. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

A school of thought holds that higher salaries given to senior managers, compared to other
employees
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 would be advantageous. From my perspective, I partially agree with
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 perception
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 the following reasons. On the one hand,
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 benefits offered to those in senior management positions are understandable for their pivotal roles and
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hierarchical
 setting within the workplace. Managers primarily dictate the success of the company by setting
work flow
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 and providing guidance, which often
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requires
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 a depth level of knowledge and
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 thinking.
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 demanding missions can
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 found in the employees, who normally
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 fewer
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, equally important is the entire dedication of the staff that
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also
deserve
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deserves
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 well-paid salaries. Without altogether resources from the In conclusion, I contend that not only the higher-ups but
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 workers should receive high
s
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salaries

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planning
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content
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closing
Finish with a short conclusion that restates your view.
language
Use plain words and check your grammar so your meaning is clear.
idea
You show a clear view of partial agreement.
structure
You try to use linking words like On the one hand and However.
content
The topic is on task and the aim is clear.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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