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Band 6.5

The line graph below shows the oil production and consumption in China between 1982 and 2006.

The graph below
present
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China
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's
oil
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 production and
consumption
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 between 1982 and 2006.
Overall
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,
China
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's
oil
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consumption
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are
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is
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 increasing significantly,
while
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their
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its
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 production cannot meet the same
pace
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pace,
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as
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which
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it
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categorized
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 as stagnant. At
first,
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China
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 only
need
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 2
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millions
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million
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of
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oil
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barrels
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 per
day
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 in 1982
,
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.
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This
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 amount will be the same for the next 2 periods.
However
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, between 1990 to 1994,
there's
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there was
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 an
increases
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increase
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of
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in
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oil
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 needs, from 2
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millions
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million
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 to almost 4
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
day
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. For the next period, it will increase to 4
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millions
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million
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 per
day
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.
At the end
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,
China
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's
oil
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consumption
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 in 2006 was 6
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
day
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. For productions, in
1982
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1982,
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china
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China
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 had
surplus
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a surplus
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 by producing 3
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millions
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million
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 per
day
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. But, in the next period until the end
in
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of
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 2006, the
oil
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 production only
increase
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increased
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 to 3,5
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millions
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million
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barrels
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 per
days
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day
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.
This
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 is very far from the
consumption
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 the
chinese
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Chinese
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 government needed.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, oil, consumption, millions, barrels, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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