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The chart below shows the percentage of people who used computers in three countries across three different age groups in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates the proportion of computer users among three age groups in different nations in 2007. Units are measured in percentage, unless
otherwise
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Overall
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, it is apparent that both 16-24
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year-old
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24-year-old
 males and females spent the longest time using computers, which was in stark contrast to those in
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the 55
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age
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 old. Notably,
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the two
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 genders shared
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 comparable number of hours on
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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