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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
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 utilised for industrial, agricultural and domestic
usage
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 in North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central and South East
Asia
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that there were variations
of
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in
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water
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usage
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 among the countries for
given
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the given
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 three purposes.
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, the highest proportion of
water
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 utilisation was acquired for agricultural purposes among all the given countries, except for North
America
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 and Europe. In North
America
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 and Europe, the highest figures were recorded for industrial
usage
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,
each
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which
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 accounted for nearly half of
its
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their
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 total percentage.
Furthermore
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, South
America
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's
water
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usage
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 for industrial practices was recorded as 10% which was
near
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nearly
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 half less than that for its domestic use. It is noteworthy that
majority
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the majority
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 of
water
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 utilisation was acquired for agricultural practices in the same country. There were similar
proportion
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proportions
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 of figures acquired for agricultural practices in Africa, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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which
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, which
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 accounted
over
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for over
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 80% of the total percentage.
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, equal figures were reported for domestic
usage
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 for Central and South East
Asia
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, accounting for 7%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, usage, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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