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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production in France in two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The following graphs
gives
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give
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 information about various
type
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types
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 of power generation in
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france
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France
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 in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
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, coal and Gas
was
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 the most common energy production used in
France
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.
While
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 Nuclear was the minority.
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 with, in 1990, coal was just under
the
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half of the rate. In 2005, the number increased slightly to 30.93
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percent
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per cent
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.
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, the percentage of gas was 29.63%. In the second
year
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 the proportion climbed
slowley
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slowly
 to nearly
the
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half.  Using Petra in
France
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 was exactly 29.27
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percent
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.
Then
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 the percentage fell
down
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to around 19
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percent
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per cent
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. Nuclear and other production were the lowest percentage with 6.40% and 4.90% in the first year. In 2005,
France
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use
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 just 10.10
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percent
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per cent
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.
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Also
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 other power was approximately 9.10
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percent
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per cent
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words france, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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