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The line graph and the bar chart give the information and forecast about the vehicle numbers and CO2 emission in England and Wales between 2000 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The given line and bar chart represent the number of
vehicles
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 and the amount of CO2
emission
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emissions
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 in England and Wales from 2000 to 2020. In general, the number of
vehicles
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 in England and Wales is increasing over the period. Cars produce the highest level of CO2
emissions
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 compared with other vehicle types,
such
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 as buses, vans, and trucks. In 2000, the count of
vehicles
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 was approximately 20
million
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, and it increased gradually to 30
million
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 and 35
million
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 in 2005 and 2010. The figure rose significantly by 15
million
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, and continued to increase to around 60
million
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vehicles
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 in 2020. Between 2000 and 2020,
emissions
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 caused by cars climbed gradually from around 2.25
tonnes
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 to approximately 3
tonnes
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. Trucks produced the second-highest amount of CO2, with over 0.5
tonnes
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 in 2000. By the end of the period, truck
emissions
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 stood at about 1.5
tonnes
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. Vans contributed about 0.5
tonnes
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 of
emissions
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 in 2000, and the figure slightly increased by 0.5
tonnes
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 in 2010. In 2020, the amount of CO2
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 vans remained constant at roughly 1.5
tonnes
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. Buses produced the lowest
emissions
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 that contributed to carbon
emissions
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 in England and Wales, at just under 0.5
tonnes
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 in 2000. In 2010, bus
emissions
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 edged up by 0.24
tonnes
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 and showed no significant change until 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles, co, emissions, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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