The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activities in 2010.

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and
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doing regular physical activity in 2010 in different
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groups. A glance at the graph reveals that the female percentage was the highest across all ages. Not only is
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point clear, but the male percentage
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fluctuated over different groups. Notably,
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in the group's
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range from 35 to 64 recorded the highest figure at around 53%,
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at the same
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were less than
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by about 10 to 11%.
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, in groups
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range of 25 to 34 , the female proportion was almost 50% , in comparison to
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nearly about 45 for
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.
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,
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from 15 to 24 were at 52%,
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were just 47%. It is obvious that the group ages over 65,
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and
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, recorded similar percentages at 46.7 for
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and 47.1 for
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.

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