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The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts tell the information about the results of a questionnaire which was given to 100
guest
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guests
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 of the
parkway hotel
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Parkway Hotel
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 in two distinct years.
Overall
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, there were five
level
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levels
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 of
costumers
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customer
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servive
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service
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such
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us
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as
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,
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apply
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 excellent, good, satisfactory, poor, and very poor. In 2005, the highest response of visitors to
custumer
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customer
 service was satisfactory with 45%.
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 the second answer was poor at 21% of percentage. The lowest number that was given by
costumers
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customers
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 was excellent with 5%.
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, the satisfaction of customer service
was
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apply
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increase
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increased
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 significantly in 2010
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, which
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which
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with
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 the top
respond was
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response being
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 good
with
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, with
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 39% of percentage. Excellent was the second with 28%.
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 the negative result of very poor was
decrease
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a decrease
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in
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of
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 4%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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