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The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countried in the same period.

The bar charts illustrate offer average population of England and Wales between 1700and 2000. The second bar
charts
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chart
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 in the question
to give
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gives
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 some details about the
birth
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 and
death
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 in the same countries in the same
term
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period
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. In
general
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general,
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 we can see that the number of
the
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apply
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birth
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births
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 increased sharply
while
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 the cost of
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death
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law
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toll
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 significantly incredibly. At the beginning of the period in
the
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England in the
1800
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1800s
 year it was to rise cost
Birth
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 to around 23 .But in
the
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wales
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Wales
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 in the
1700
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1700s
year
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apply
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the show
drop
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dropped
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 gradually
of
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apply
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overall
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to
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, to
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death
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 nearly 9
.
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deaths.
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On the other hand
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 list of population in
the
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England and Wales
in
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apply
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the
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Since 2000.
It
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was
totally
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total
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of
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number of
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birth
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births
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 decreased slightly
about
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, about
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 11
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, comparative
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comparative
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compared
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with
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to
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number
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the number
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of death
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death
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deaths
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 it was remained stable
almost
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at almost
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words birth, death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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