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The graphs below show predicted trends for the audience of the online TV channel, iTV, both globally and regionally. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show predicted trends for the audience of the online TV channel, iTV, both globally and regionally. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first line
graph
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 shows the
number
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 of global viewers in
millions
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 between 2012 and 2019. The second chart shows the local spectators in
millions
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 from the five parts of the world in 2017, 2018 and 2019.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of global audience increased slightly before 2015,
then
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 it decreased sharply and again
rised
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rose
. Turning to the second
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graph
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graph,
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 there
was
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were
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 no big changes over the period.The region that has
large
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a large
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number
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 of spectators was Asia and the Pacific,
while
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Americas
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the Americas
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has
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had
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 the smallest
number
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 of audience. In the first line
graph
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, the
number
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 of viewership increased slowly from 133 to 146
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millions
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million
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 between 2012 and 2015
,
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however
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however,
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 it decreased in 2016 to 140
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millions
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million
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.
Then
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 the
number
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 rose again to 156
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millions
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million
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. Returning to the second line
graph
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, Asia and the Pacific
has
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have
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 the largest
number
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 of regional viewers every year.
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ranked&nbsp
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ranked
;
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apply
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 Africa and the Middle East
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, that
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that
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which
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 increased from 41 to 51&nbsp
;
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apply
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millions
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million
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 over the period. Eurasia's  audience slipped a little, meanwhile Europe and
Americas
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the Americas
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 have
the
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a
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 similar
number
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 of watchers with 12 and 8
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millions
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million
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 between 2017 and 2019, respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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