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Nowadays managers and team leaders in different organizations are much younger compared to the past. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, there is an increasing debate over whether is positive or negative effects may cause using youngsters as leaders of corporations, with some arguing that it is beneficial and others believing that
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 can bring more drawbacks. Personally, I strongly believe that it is a positive development. On the one hand, disadvantages like a lack of experience may bring no less issues.
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 correctly. They,
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, make mistakes once in a blue moon.
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, senior heads are aware of different problematic circumstances, and in any
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 they can overcome it.
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, junior ones are new at
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,
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, plenty of faults are inevitable.
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 kind of trouble can be seen in my past. For a year, I should take my father's position at his job.
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 sank into a big trouble and could not solve it for a month, he alleviated it for a day. Despite
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 downside, the advantages are greater. New technologies like AI (artificial intelligence) or the internet, which can provide an opportunity to find any information, give rise
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 gaining faster expertise. Should youthful bosses make a mistake, they can easily find the solution from the online world, regardless of what the fault is . Seniors,
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, industry and make decisions by old principles, and it really reduces the productivity of the company.
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 cannot be seen in the young generations.
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, junior heads are moslty tend to be at least bilingual.
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, signing contracts with other countries is easier. In conclusion, the biggest reason for hiring youthful bosses is mainly
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 their working principles , and
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 has disadvantages, they can be outweighed by advantages.

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structure
Plan before you write. Use 4 short paragraphs: intro, 2 body parts, and a short ending. Put one main idea in each body.
introduction
Make the start clear. In the first line say what you think. End with a clear view as well.
coherence
Keep one idea per paragraph. Use simple link words like and, but, also, for example to join ideas.
content
Add more real examples. Small facts or simple cases help your point.
language
Check grammar and spell. Use the same tense and easy words.
idea
You show a view that younger leaders can bring new tech and quick help.
structure
You try to compare new and old ways of work.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advanced education
  • Early career development
  • Technological advancements
  • Digital revolution
  • Organizational structures
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Adaptability
  • Productivity
  • Competitive
  • Global markets
  • Multicultural team dynamics
  • Generational differences
  • Suboptimal decision-making
  • Rapid promotion
  • Traditional managerial skills
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