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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The pie charts provide statistics about the usage of
water
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 in six different
areas
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 of the world.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 the aim of
water
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 spent is unbalanced in these six
areas
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, especially Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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 fill a huge space on their own charts with agricultural
water
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use
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.
On the other hand
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, the distribution is more balanced in North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe. In order to create an order
according to
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 the percentage of the
water
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use
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 in one purpose from high to low, Central
Asia
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 is top
on
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of
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 the list with eighty eight
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percent
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cent
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 of agricultural
water
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use
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.
Furthermore
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, Central
Asia
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 takes the top again in the reverse version of the same order
with
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, with
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 only five
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percent
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per cent
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 of domestic
use
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.
In addition
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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 have almost the same view of pie charts
with
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as
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the
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apply
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Central
Asia
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. The difference between these three
areas
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 never gets over more than seven
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percent
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per cent
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.
However
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, it’s not valid for North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe. It’s clear that South
America
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 dominates the agricultural
use
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 with seventy one
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percent
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cent
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. On the
second
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other
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 hand, North
America
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 and Europe look
similiar
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similar
and
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, and
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 it’s not possible to see a difference between these two
areas
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more
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of more
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 than seven
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percent
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per cent
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as
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, as
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 we said before
for
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, for
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 the
areas
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 in
Asia
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 and Africa.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, asia, use, america, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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