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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts provide statistics about the usage of
water
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 in six different
areas
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 of the world.
Overall
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, the aim of
water
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 spent is not balanced in these six
areas
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, especially Central
Asia
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, Africa and South East
Asia
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, which fill a huge space on their own charts with agricultural
water
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use
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.
On the other hand
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, the distribution is more balanced in North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe. In order to create an order
according to
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 the percentage of the
water
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use
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 for one purpose from high to low, Central
Asia
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 is
on
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at
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 the top of the list with eighty-eight
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percent
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per cent
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 of agricultural
water
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use
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.
Furthermore
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, Central
Asia
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 takes the top again in the reverse version of the same order, with only five
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percent
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per cent
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 of domestic
use
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.
In addition
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, Africa and
South East
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Southeast
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Asia
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 have almost the same view of pie charts as Central
Asia
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. The difference between these three
areas
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 never gets over more than seven
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percent
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per cent
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.
However
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,
this
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 is not valid for North
America
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, South
America
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 and Europe.
It is clear that
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 South
America
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 dominates the agricultural
use
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 with seventy-one
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percent
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per cent
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. On the
second
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other
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 hand, North
America
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 and Europe look similar, and it is not possible to see a difference between these two
areas
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more
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of more
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 than seven
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percent
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per cent
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, as mentioned before for the
areas
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 in
Asia
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 and Africa.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, areas, asia, use, america, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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