The two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors’ contribution to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 201

The pie charts compare the career and academic choices made by high school

graduates

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in Lakeside County in 2010 and 2020.

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it is clear that

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going to college remained the most popular option in both years, despite a noticeable decline over the decade. At the same time, there was a significant rise in employment and entrepreneurship, suggesting a shift towards more practical career paths. In 2010, a clear majority of

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(55%) chose to continue their education by going to college.

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was followed by those who entered freelance or informal work, accounting for 24%. Smaller proportions opted for regular employment (11%),

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only 5% started their own businesses. An equal percentage of

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had no clear plans for the future. By 2020, the proportion of students going to college had dropped considerably to 38%,

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it still represented the largest segment.

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, the percentage of

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who started a business rose sharply to 24%, nearly five times higher than in 2010.

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, regular employment increased to 13%,

while

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freelance or informal work declined to 10%. Notably, the share of students with no idea about their future

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rose, reaching 15%.

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