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The chart below shows the percentage of people buying goods and services online in 2019 and 2024. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The aim of
this
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 the graphs which show the
percentages
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 in three different countries ordering or buying
goods
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 and services in different
lifetimes
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years
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 (2024 and 2019).
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, it can be seen that in
2019
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2019,
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people
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 were buying or ordering
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goods
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fewer goods
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less
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apply
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than in 2024. In
2019
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2019,
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Lithuania
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 had 49% of
people
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 ordering
goods
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online
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online,
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while
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Ireland
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 had 65% of
individuals
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 ordering online
and
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 Bulgaria had the least amount (21%) of
people
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 ordering
goods
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 compared to
Ireland
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 and
Lithuania
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.
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, from the
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percentages
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percentages,
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 it can be seen that
Ireland
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 had the biggest majority of
individuals
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 ordering stuff online. Moving on, in
2024
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2024,
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Ireland
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still was
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was still
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 in the leading spot with 94% of
individuals
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 ordering online
but
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, but
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 there is a clear range between 94% and 65%. Bulgaria
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 increased the
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percentages
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percentage
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 from 21% to 51%.
However
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,
Lithuania
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 stands in the middle and the study spike from 49% to 65%.
In contrast
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, the differences can be seen that in
2019
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2019,
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people
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 were more likely to buy clothes or anything like that in the stores, that way they can see the product in real life and know more about the product. In 2024, there is generally a big spike
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percentages
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 in these three countries.
People
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more freely
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apply
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were ordering things online
.
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more freely.
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 Generally, all the
individuals
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 in 2024 were ordering much more than in 2019. The country that stands the most is
Ireland
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with
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, with
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 94% of
individuals
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 who ordered online in 2024.
Lithuania
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 were in the middle with 65% of
individuals
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and
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, and
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 Bulgaria had the least amount of
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percentages
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percentage
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which
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, which
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 is 51%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentages, goods, people, lithuania, ireland, individuals with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stands" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • percent/percent
  • year
  • 2019
  • 2024
  • online shopping
  • goods
  • services
  • increase
  • rise
  • grow
  • higher
  • lower
  • more people
  • fewer people
  • both
  • two
  • years
  • change
  • difference
  • trend
  • compare
  • show
  • overall
  • report
  • feature
  • pattern
  • data
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