The chart below shows the changes in UK's birth rate from 1973 to 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The
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graph illustrates the birth rate of women, tracking changes in 6 different
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groups over the period from 1973 to 2008.
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, the data reveals that the most
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fluctuating
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was observed in
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-29
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group
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.
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, the trend which belonged to
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and over
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almost stayed the same throughout the period. In detail, the
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for
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-29
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decreased from 140 to 120 a decade later,
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rose to almost 140 again in 1993. Between 1998-
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it reached its lowest level
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to under 120. A noticeable decrease was seen in the
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of 20-25, starting slightly more than 120 and
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up at around 90
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of the period. The trend for the
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of
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under 20 faced a moderate decrease and went down from 60 to 40. Between 1988-1993 birth rate for those under 20 was the same as
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the
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of 35-39
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around approximately 50. The
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for the
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of 30-35 climbed from 70 to slightly over 80 in the final quarter.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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