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he graph below shows the population of India and China from the year 2000 to the present day with projections for growth to the year 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The presented graph describes how the
population
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 of both
China
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 and India has
incrased
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increased
 or
decrased
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decreased
 and how it is expected to develop to the
year
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 2050. The
amonts
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amounts
 of
people
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 are
presated
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presented
 in billions
and
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, and
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 the data is from the
year
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 2000 to the present (apart from the predictions). Starting with
China
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, the total
population
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 in the
year
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 2000 was
of
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1250
billion
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people
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. From that
year
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 to the
present
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present,
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 it
remained
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has remained
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 increasing.
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, in 2010 the
population
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 was
of
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1350
billion
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people
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 and in 2020 it rose to around 1400
billion
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people
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. It is shown that it is expected to rise to 1450
billion
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people
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to
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by
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 the
year
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 2030 and
then
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 start decreasing. In 2050, the
population
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 in
China
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 is expected to be less than 1400
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billion
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million
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.
On the other hand
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, India is expected to keep
incrasing
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increasing
. In the
year
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 2000, it started with a smaller
population
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 than
China
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 of 1000
billion
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people
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. It can be seen that it
kept
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 increasing to the present. In the
graph
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 it reached
China
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's expected
population
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 of 1450
billion
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people
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 in 2030. The
population
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 in 2010 almost reached 1200
billion
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people
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and
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, and
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 in 2020 the number
rised
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rose
 to more than 1300. It is
visualized
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visualised
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 that in 2050 the
population
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 number will
incrase
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increase
 to 1600, which represents 200
billion
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 more
people
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 than the expectations for
China
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. The previous data is what can be understood and concluded from the presented graph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, china, year, people, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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