You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town. Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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letter finds you well. My name is Alice
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I am looking to purchase electronic gadgets from your
store
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store,
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for which I want some details. I will be very grateful if you could answer my queries. Well, I am looking to buy an Air fryer and a toaster. Both of them should be manufactured by
company
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the company
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Ninja because I have heard great reviews about them. There is no electrical shop in my town which
sell
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sells
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these products. I have checked your store's website
which
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, which
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says that you have the Air
fryer
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Fryer
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. Could you keep one reserved for me? Please let me know if you can
order
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a toaster for me too from your
vender
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.
However
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, I was not able to see the price details on the internet. It would be great if you could let me know the price for both
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apply
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appliances. I can
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come next month to pick up my
order
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. Please let me know if you can hold on to my
order
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till
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or
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do I need to place the
order
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on a later date. I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Yours faithfully, Simran

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coherence and cohesion
Group each main idea in its own paragraph and keep ideas clear. Add a short close line.
task response
Ask clear and new questions, like the price of each item, total price, and how long the hold can be kept. Also check if delivery or pickup is possible.
tone
Keep a polite, formal tone and use phrases like 'could you' and 'please'.
content
Clear aim to buy and ask about stock, price, and hold.
tone
Polite and formal tone is shown.
content
Gives the items and asks for order option.
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