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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

These days, it can be commonly observed that people have been debating
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the role of
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 in children's lives.
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 some believe that it is essential to teach them to distinguish what is right or wrong from childhood, using different types of
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, others stand for avoiding the
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. I am convinced that some gentle parenting is necessary, since it is significant for young individuals to understand the consequences of their actions and build their personal boundaries. First and foremost, it is considered that kind
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of
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 in youths' appreciation of negative
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 from some situations. Temporary removal of privileges
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 children realise that unacceptable behaviour leads to
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 when a child repeatedly interrupts others in class and is asked to sit apart for a short period, they learn the importance of respect and self-discipline.
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, parenting is crucial in terms of establishing healthy personal boundaries. The more times
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 needs to
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, the more determined they will be.
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,
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 the understanding of consequences come with
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, but
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 boundaries will be established. Regarding the types of
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task response
State your full view and answer both parts of the question. End with a short conclusion that restates your view. Use one main idea per paragraph and give a simple example.
coherence
Put ideas in a clear order. Use linking words like first, next, and finally. Keep sentences short and fix big spelling mistakes. Make each paragraph about one idea.
stance
Your view on gentle parenting is clear.
example
You give a concrete example about removing privileges.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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